Friday, May 29, 2015
Short Story: That's My Mercy Girl- A Vampire Tale
This story is based on the Mercy Brown Vampire Incident. A real historic event that happened in Exeter, Rhode Island during the New England Vampire Panic.
I have stayed as true to the facts as I could, however I changed the ending and took creative licenses with the characters and their personalities and motivations.
You can read about the real Mercy Brown here:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mercy_Brown_vampire_incident
Trigger Warning: Rape and child abuse (not actual scenes of it, cause yuck....but Mercy does mention being abused.)
January 1892
Exeter, Rhode Island
“Mercy you look sickly, you had better come inside and rest.”
Mercy paused, dragging on her coat, hand on the door, almost out, almost free. Her father, George, was looking thin and pale himself, but she knew better than to comment on that, obviously the only thing her tainted stew had done was to make him retch all last night and still be alive to bother her this morning.
“I have stuff to do.” It was as good an excuse as any.
“With your mother gone I need you here, your brother isn’t doing so well and you need to tend us both.” George gave a thin lipped smile.
Mercy shivered, she knew that smile alright, knew it too well, just like she knew what he really meant by “with your mother gone I need you here.”
“I am going to pick up the milk from Mrs. Larkin, she promised it yesterday in exchange for mushrooms.” Mercy held out the basket she had swiped from the cook, it held about ten sad looking mushrooms. Pitiful really, but with the ground so cold and Edwin recently ill it was the best her father could do.
“Alright then, but when you get home I want you to bathe before I see you.” George’s cheeks turned beat red as he left the room.
Mercy pushed against the solid wood door and lifted her face to the bitter wind and ice blue sky. She wouldn’t bathe, hadn’t in a week, simply to keep him off her, keep him away from her. It wouldn’t last much longer however, last time he drew her a bath himself and dragged her into the bathroom, forcing the water and himself on her.
She pounded her boots against the frozen ground to warm them up and tucked a strand of dirty blonde hair farther back under her hat and hood as she made her way down the path to Mrs. Larkin’s home. Their family owned a large dairy farm.
It was growing dark and colder as Mercy reached the door to the house, the Larkin home was far more cheerful than her own of late. Mercy wasn’t afraid of the dark, she welcomed it, so much easier to hide, even if she almost froze to death, anything was better than what awaited at night, in her own bed.
“Mercy! I didn’t think you were coming.” Mrs. Larkin opened the door, a forced smile on her face, a ruddy, chubby woman in her late 30’s.
“Sorry, I had chores, here are the mushrooms.” Mercy held out the basket, her bare hands numb.
“Goodness child! Here.” The older woman took the basket and then pressed some worn mittens into Mercy’s hands, “Didn’t your mother teach you anything before she died? You are 19, these are skills you should have.”
Mercy’s mother and older sister had died of consumption almost four years before, Mercy had been 15.
“Kind of, but I’m only good enough to mend things, not make them.” Mercy put the mittens on gratefully and then looked down at her feet. She tried to appear as sickly and feeble minded as possible. It prevented people from keeping to close and eye on her or trying to marry her off to their horrible sons. She had perfected the art of invisibility, it helped keep George away from her in longer intervals.
“Well you best learn, especially with a father and brother to help care for. Here’s the milk.” She brought out a pail with fresh milk, then with a curl of her lip she also handed Mercy a bit of cheese wrapped up, “keep that for yourself, you look like you could use a decent meal.” A few seconds later she shut the door.
Mercy went back home and gave the food and drink to their cook. Cook was a pleasant woman, if not a tad abrupt, who only came a few hours each evening. She made supper and then baked and made food to put in the pantry for the next day. She also tidied up a bit, helped with the things Mercy’s mom and oldest sister used to do. Mercy had long ago made it clear she was too incompetent to help with the more complex and difficult house hold chores.
Mercy had considered asking the older woman for help, but knew the woman would be able to do little if anything….plus cook might not be believed and then she would lose employment all over town. Mercy couldn’t do that to her…it was too risky.
“Girl you best get out of here before your father catches you. He wants you scrubbed clean and I don’t want him to punish you.” Cook told her, eyes full of sympathy…
Then there were times like these that Mercy thought, “You horrible hag…you KNOW!”
Mercy nodded and fled the house, she made her way down past the church towards the cemetery. It had grown dark, but the moon was full and shining and Mercy knew her town and its roads like the back of her hand.
She wandered through the tombstones until she found her mom and sister’s graves. A cold hard feeling in her stomach, eyes and throat burning with hate.
“They are there the way you wanted them.” A voice from behind her said. She spun around quickly, gripping the crucifix at her throat. She knew the speaker, had known him for years, but it didn’t mean she trusted him.
He was a tall pale man, with long fingers, eyes that burned yellow and hair pale white. He wore the finest of men’s attire and still looked complacently out of place for the time period. He was ageless, looking not young and not old; like he was carved of stone and frozen in time.
“Bartholomew, I have asked you not to sneak up on me.”
“Why would I obey such a command when I get such pleasure out of it?” He smiled, his teeth gleamed white and perfect. He took a deep breath and wrinkled his nose.
“Mercy, would it kill you to bathe?”
“You know it just might.” Mercy bantered back, for the first time in a few days she relaxed and gave him a genuine smile.
“Why are you here mourning these women?” He asked.
“They were my family, sometimes I miss them.”
“Do you regret your choice?”
“Never, they deserved it…” Mercy swallowed, her stomach churned. The first time her father came for her Mercy had been 10. She told Mary Olive, her sister…. Mary Olive had tattled to their mother who had beaten Mercy for lying and having impure thoughts. For over a year she had tried to get them to help her, to believe her and they had ignored her. One night she had run away, hidden in the cemetery and prayed for death.
Death hadn’t come, but Bartholomew had and it was better.
“Do you want me to take Edwin tonight?” Bartholomew asked.
“No….it won’t matter…George will keep coming for me until I can get out of the house. Hopefully that will be sooner rather than later.” Mercy slouched against the tombstones, she would succeed at some point, she just didn't want to hang for patricide.
A few months ago Edwin had walked in her room after George had just left it, he had put two and two together easily enough, but it had come out 5 instead of 4. He had accused her of being a harlot; tempting their Christian father into evil.
"Why have you never asked me to kill your father?" The vampire asked.
"Because I have always planned to do that myself. I have a tried a few times...they failed...but I will end him with my own hands. I want my face to be the last he ever sees."
“That I believe I can help with. I could make you like me, you would have the strength and power to kill him then and we could run away together.”
“Together?” Mercy narrowed her eyes, she never wanted another man to touch her…ever.
“Yes, in any way you would like….You know I would never ask more than what you are comfortable with…But I could use a change of scenery and some company. I know under all that dirt you are a smart pretty girl.” He raised an eyebrow.
“Alright.” Mercy made the decision quickly, she pulled off her necklace and let it drop to the ground.
Bartholomew wasted no time, he lunged forward and grabbed her shoulders, almost painfully, dragging her to him and buried his fangs in her neck. He had been telling the truth, he was fond of her, had been since the day he offered her a kerchief to wipe away her tears.
As her blood flowed over his tongue he felt satisfaction, over the years he had yearned to taste her, but she always wore the damn cross. He wasn’t a hero after all. He moaned against Mercy’s neck, she did not disappoint; her blood was strong and vibrant. He fed until she was a limp doll in his arms, light fading from her eyes. Pulling back, he bit his own wrist and allowed his blood to drip into her open mouth.
Bartholomew carried her back home and placed her in bed. He covered her gently, tucking her in and made sure no trace of his bite was left to be seen before disappearing into the night.
How George wailed when he found her, presumably dead, the next morning. A grief stricken papa, he basked in the warmth of his neighbors. Two daughters dead, a wife dead and a sick son? His friends brought food and drink, prayed with him, and comforted him as he regaled them with tales of a simple, plain daughter forever loyal to her father.
Two nights after she was buried, Mercy rose, she bathed in the ice cold river, not even feeling it, she stole good clothes from beautiful neighbor girls and dressed like she had always wanted to. She wandered her town finally making her way home. When Bartholomew found her she was standing in the middle of her parlor, stained red, blood everywhere, her eyes sparkling. Edwin and George’s bodies at her feet, gutted and torn up. She smiled at her maker through blood stained teeth. The air stank of fear and revenge.
Bartholomew held out his hand, a grin splaying over his own mouth. She reached for him, palms crimson, gore under her nails.
He said:
“There, there now…That’s my girl.”
Written by Renee Lake Copyright May 29th 2015. No parts of this story may be used or copied without the author's consent: in writing.
Friday, May 22, 2015
The Boy Meets Girl Massacre by Ainslie Hogarth

I was given a copy of this novel from the publisher on net galley in exchange for an honest review
WARNING: While this does not contain true spoilers, I do use book quotes to get my points across.
Noelle takes a summer nightshift job at the infamous Boy Meets Girl Inn, even though she's well aware of the grisly murders that happened there decades ago. That's why she has a diary—to write down everything she experiences in case things go bump in the night. But the inexplicable freezing drafts, the migrating rotten-flesh smell, and the misplaced personal items don't really scare her. Noelle has bigger problems: her father's ailing health, her friend Alfred's inappropriate crush, and the sore spot on the back of her head that keeps getting worse.
When a party commemorating the anniversary of the original killings ends in a ghoulish bloodbath, Noelle's diary becomes the key piece of evidence for investigators. But the cryptic and often incoherent entries suggest there is more to the bizarre case than can be rationally explained...
This book was awful, there I said it. I HATED it. It was foul, not scary, and poorly written. The only interesting thing was the fact this was an "annotated" version. Which means the style this was written in is a found journal being reviewed to become a horror movie. So it has police footnotes and notes from the movie people. Which were the ONLY pieces of writing worth reading.
I can get what the author was trying for, a scary ghost story with a fucked up main character who feels a bit crazy and weird, with parts deemed to disturb, bother and disgust the reader into being freaked out. However, the author failed. All she managed to do was gross me out so that I didn't even want to finish it, not scare me and make the main character unsympathetic and revolting.( AND NOT IN A GOOD WAY.)
1) There is WAY too much description in this book that needs a super good editor. Not just too much description but description that doesn't make sense.
"Amidst all the filling and spilling of patterned space, my sore brain just kind of vaporizes. And it hisses out of my ears like a really satisfying fart."
"Patterned space is the perfect temperature, moist warm insides of a just done cake; patterned space enters my body and fills it up and spills it back out again, scary at first but just for a split second, and then you let it happen, filling up and spilling out and filling up and spilling over and over again."
"Staring at the woman's floured eyes." MC uses this description so many times and I still have NO idea what it means. I didn't realize floured was a adjective.
2)Some things that the MC says are kind of real, bust mostly she whines and is annoying. Like she is kind of mean and her inner dialouge is totally what people think but would never say out loud...Then the author takes it too far and you are like, "Whoa, what the hell was that?"
3)She is SO angsty and over emotional and all over the place. The footnotes at one point state, "We're going to have to scrap all this touchy feely teenage stuff. That's what books are for." I was reading thinking, "cut this crap from the book too!"
4) At one point she decides her diary is alive and has a "birthing it" kind of ceremony. From then on she treats the damn thing like a living creature. While at times she seems normal then she does the weird living dairy thing and the creepy bits with the spot on her scalp and it's confusing... Was I supposed to decide this girl was legit crazy?
5)About 30 % into this book I had to stop and really think, "what is this book about? Where is the plot?" Cause seriously, up until then it was just a bunch of crazy writing, emo junk and over description of the weird canker sore in her brain and how she likes to dig her fingers into the sore spot on her scalp. (eeeww)
6)The author had so many comments about fat people it became less about describing the characters and more about how the author couldn't find any other way to make a character repulsive. She just kept using the words; fat, overweight, enormous and pudgy. She made every unsavory character like the MC's dad and the .... bad guy??? (to be honest never could quite figure out who the villain was) out to be a slovenly over weight person. In fact the fat people details just got worse and worse. Like this bit that honestly didn't improve the scene at all:
"He strapped her to the bed, not that she could have easily gotten up anyway being as big as she was, and over time severed each of her limbs with care, one by one, tying them off tight as sausage ends, stopping the blood off so she would remain alive."
7) This book was just plain nasty and not like torture porn or watching zombies eat brains...just nasty..Like watching a kid eat his or her boogers or watching someone lick up vomit.
8)At one point the MC is wondering whether or not she and her mom had the same vagina, like people inherit eye color. After asking around and from personalexperience I could find NO women who have ever pondered whether or not they inherited their mother's vagina. I actually wondered for a moment if a man wrote this based on how the female characters are written and portrayed...But no, it's a woman author.
9) Trigger warning; this book contains an emotionally and mentally abusive father figure. (who of course is a big fat sick lazy arse.)
SO yeah without giving anything away I cannot truly describe how revolting this book was to read, and I like horror. There were ghosts, but lame ones and it wasn't scary not one bit. It leaves things unexplained and unresolved, but not in a cool or interesting way and was just totally an uninspiring get-through-it-as-quick-as-you-can read.
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